4、实事事你有没有思考并回答读者最想问的问题？5、实事事你的文章是否江苏教育新闻像你的人？有没有在陈述自己时过于正式？是不是过于随意？寻找一种适合主题的语调(乏味的语调会毁了一个好故事)。
西学Thisismyfamily.Therearefourpeopleinmyfamily.Mygrandmother,myfather,mymotherandme.Mygrandmotherhasshortwhitehair.Shelooksverynice.Myfatherhasshortblackhairandsmalleyes.Helooksveryfat,soIoftencallhimfatman实事事OK,letmetellyousomethingaboutmyweekend.Iamgoingtodomanythingsandbeverybusyontheweekend.SoIdomyhomeworkonSaturdaymorning.Intheafternoon,Iamgoingtodohouseworkwithmymother.BecauseIamagoodgirl,Ia江苏教育新闻mhelpfulathome.OnSundaymorning,Iamgoingtovisitmygrandparentswithmyparents.Intheafternoon,wearegoingtotheparktogether.Becausethereisakiteshow.Andmygrandparentslikesmakingkites.Ithink,wecanseemanybeautifulkitesthere.Andwearegoingtobuysomebeautifulkites,too.Then,wearegoingtoflythenewkites,thatsfun.Intheevening,wearegoingtohaveabigdinner.Wearegoingtohavefishfordinner.Becausemygrandparentslikeseatingfish.Andmygrandmacooksfishwell.Afterdinner,wearegoingtowatchTVtogether.Wearegoingtobeveryhappy.Thisismyhappyweekend.Ilikemyweekendverymuch.Whataboutyourweekend?Canyoutellme?
西学MayDayiscoming.ImsohappybecausemyfatherandmymothertakemetoWuQuanParkthisholiday.Inthepark,Iseemanytreesandbeautifulflowers.Therearemanychildrenandmanyhappyplayinggames,too.Myparentstakemetothezoo.Therearelions,tigers,eagles,bears,deer,monkeys,andsoon.Ilikethemonkeysbestbecausetheyareverycleverandtheymakeuslaugh.Howlovelytheyare!Ihaveagoodtimethatday.Whatabeautifulandhappyholiday.实事事iam'alwaysbusywithmylessons.whatihavetodoeverydayisnothingbutstudy.luckily,lastsummermyfamilywenttomyuncle'sfarm.weenjoyedareallyinterestingholiday.duringtheholiday,ididn'thavetogetupearly,nordidineedtofinishmanyexercises.irodethehorseinthefields.imilkedthecowsonthefarm.tomygreatjoy,myuncleinvitedmetogofishing.lifeonthefarmisquitedifferentfromthatatschool.iwanttogobacktospendmysummerholidayagain.西学panda―thenationaltreasurepandaisoneofthescarcestanimals.peopleintheworldlikeitverymuch.thereusedtobemanypandas江苏教育新闻inchinalongago.asthebalanceofnaturewasdestroyedandtheweatherwasgettingwarmerandwarmer,pandasbecameless.butatpresent,thenumberofpandasisincreasingyearbyyear.therearenowsomanypandasthatsomearebeingsenttoothercountriessothatpeopletherecanenjoythem.nowadays,thebiggestnatureparkforpandainchinaisinsichuan.thereisaresearchcentrefornatureandwildlifethere.scientistshopethatonedaytheywillhaveenoughpandastobesetfreeandletthemliveinthewildagain.
实事事Todayismother'sbirthday.Igivemotherboughtanicebigcake,andsingasongforher,wishherahappybirthday.Intheevening,grandpagrandma,auntandmothersomefriendsalsocametocongratulate.Motherateaheartydinner,pleasethanks.Today,it'ssonicetomum.Iamalsoveryhappy.西学MyfathermademealittlecabinonthetreewhenIwasfiveyearsold.Ilikethiscabinsomuch,itismylittleworld.Iputmanytoysinit,Idecoratethiscabinsowell.IcandowhatIwantinthislittleworld,sometimesIwillaskmyfriendstocome.Ihaveagoodtimeinmylittleworld.我的爸爸在我五岁的时候给我在树上弄了个小屋
但是那天到来的时候，实事事我忘记了我们的约定，我睡过头了，并且呆在家里看电视剧。
在朋友打电话来的时候，西学我突然想起了我们的约定，我很抱歉，那是我的错误。--罗斯金Whatmakeslifedrearyisthewantofmotive.--GeorgeEliot没有了目的，实事事生活便郁闷无光。
--苏格拉底Noneisoffreedomoroflifedeservingunlesshedailyconquersitanew.-Erasmus只有每天再度战胜生活并夺取自由的人，西学才配享受生活的自由。Wemustacceptfinitedisappointment,butwemustneverloseinfinitehope.--MattinLutherKing我们必须接受失望，实事事因为它是有限的，但千万不可失去希望，因为它是无穷的。
--史蒂文森Whilethereislifethereishope.一息若存，西学希望不灭。Ceasetostruggleandyouceasetolive.--ThomasCarlyle生命不止，实事事奋斗不息。
